first of all...why am I JUST finding out about this board lol...I'm a writer just in case y'all didn't know...here's one of my poems (actually its's a tale) entitled "Oasis"...and it was actually written for my AP English class but since I just finished typing it I wanted other people's opinions...it's not my best but it's okay I guess...
Oasis
Ray sits sobbing in his dark bathroom
He rubs his palm across his tear-stained cheek
He sobs in pain as the blood begins to leak
Suddenly, his father knocks at the door
The crimson razor blade falls to the tiled floor
“Son, what’s wrong?” said Ray’s dad
“Nothing dad, I’m just feeling kinda sad”
“I know times are rough but things will get better”
“Dad, don’t give me that crap, that bogus plea
Stop acting like you two actually care about me”
“Son, I really don’t know what you mean”
“I’m talking about you and mom, downstairs, making a scene
I’m thinking something I shouldn’t be thinking
Yea, It’s a horrible thought
That this whole situation is really my fault”
“Open this door son, face to face, we need to talk”
“No, Dad, I just need to take a walk”
The moon shone it’s light on the vacant country road
Ray sits on the curb, thinking about his troubled past
His mind was racing, racing quite fast
Ray gazed at the stars and spoke to the heavens
“God, can you just take me now, forgive me for what I’ve done wrong
This place, this hell, is not where I belong”
“Son, be a man, you must be strong
I’ve put you here for a reason, I knew this would happen all along
I’ll take you when I’m ready, but now is not the time
You’re one of my foot soldiers, and you’re on the front line
You’re a pillar of strength, you hold up my palace
So son, strong yet gentle you should be, never callous
There’s an oasis in this barren desert
You’re close, but you’re not quite there
and son, listen to your daddy, because he has something, with you, he needs to share.”
Ray’s father hugged his son ever so tight
In the early morning’s golden light
“Son, I love you with all of my heart
but as time passed, to express my love to you, has become kinda hard
Your mother and me are having troubles
But believe me son, this isn’t your fault
We sought something that we couldn’t quite bare
That oasis in the desert, son, it isn’t really there.”
“But dad you’re wrong!
It really is there, just over the horizon
Let’s hold hands and take this journey together
and someday soon, this journey will be over
Dad,
You’re my foot soldier and my pillar of strength
and together, we can get through this
Will you take this journey with me?”
“ Son, I’ll do whatever it takes to make you happy
but, a promise, I just can’t make
I don’t know if your mother feels the same
I think she’s done with this silly love game
We’ve tried and tried for far too long
Son...I’m afraid it was something I did wrong”
“But daddy, that’s okay
Because we’ve turned a stone today
Love fills this room like it never did before
I feel joy in my heart, deep down to the core
and honestly, I couldn’t ask for much more
and Dad,
no matter how old I am
I’m never too old to be loved
We’ve won a battle
and this house is no longer a shack
because these pillars are so strong and so grand
that we’ve built a mansion from the ground up
“ So son, is our journey over?”
“ Not quite dad, we still haven’t found our oasis in the desert
but we’ll get there.”
Ray and his father embarked on a journey so sweet
Only God knows when them and their destination will meet
But here, our tale ends on a pleasant note
All I ask of you is to pass down this tale, this tale I wrote.
~Victor G.
