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Short expression of pain Posted on 03-19-2008

Lt.SkndHoney_01
sacramento, CA
If you read, please comment, that will make me very happy... Also this is my first thread post. The tears are consistant, like a cascading line of fire, With all of the emotions, shes vulnerable, and exposed are her deep desires, The mystique no longer remains, and etiquacy has long since past, Her dreams have ran away, and everything she lives for is proceeding fast, She gives up on hope, because without him the high will begin to descend, Its either him or her, and shes love smitten, so her future she gives to him, Closing the doors, of fascination, and the glamorous achievement, For him she gave her world, although he couldnt see it. [original piece from Mz. Honey [Miela] written Jan. 5 2008 at 1:05 am] [[Comment please]]
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KaliBabi replied on 03-19-2008 01:42AM [Reply]
Dats hott Lt.!!! I like it.
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Lt.SkndHoney_01 from sacramento, CA replied on 03-19-2008 03:48AM [Reply]

thank you, I was bored, and so yeah... one of my short poems...
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TSUblueTiger replied on 03-19-2008 09:49AM [Reply]
It’s an awesome first post. You definitely have talent. Keep up the good work!
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SuperFly replied on 03-19-2008 10:51AM [Reply]
Sounds like dat nukka got up in yo' head...
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replied on 03-19-2008 12:06PM [Reply]
That came from boredom? Ma chere, I'd love to see what you'd come up with when you actually try!
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Smoke replied on 03-19-2008 12:35PM [Reply]
That's really hot, mami. It seems that you have put a lot of heart and emotion into that poem. Keep it up, mami.
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Lt.SkndHoney_01 from sacramento, CA replied on 03-19-2008 03:38PM [Reply]

SuperFly wrote:
Sounds like dat nukka got up in yo' head...
I guess thats what two years does to you.... But this one wasn't written because of him, I was just bored... so I wrote. Thank you guys so much!!! Im kinda embarassed now it took me forever just to let the people closest to me hear one of my old poems.
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smc112 from Laguana Hills, CA replied on 03-19-2008 03:45PM [Reply]
Nice job.
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Lt.SkndHoney_01 from sacramento, CA replied on 03-19-2008 03:47PM [Reply]

smc112 wrote:
Nice job.
Thank you!
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