Untitled ("One deep incision...")

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Greensboro, NC

P o e t i q R e i g n Greensboro, NC

this is, by far, one of my most favorite poems i've ever written....i don't know why, it just is... most of my poems, i don't like goin back 2 read too often...but i love reading this one...i don't know what it is...but anyway....it was written March 17, 2002...at 4:34 a.m.... One deep incision Distorted vision A broken heart Malfunctioning intuition. Shattered morals Scattered values Active depression Frequent blues. Choosy moments, Fickle feelings Interests, hurting Lust is killing. Incriminating thoughts Sinful desires Burning within Dangerous fires. All of her principles die Temptations rise Blood pressure, sky-high, And she knows why. Poisonous candy, the objection of her eyes... Will be the very birth...of her heart's demise.

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· May 2004

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When i read it i for the feel of a female not wanting to lose her Virginity (or somethin' to that extent) but feeling pressured to do so... and on a sidenote...how do u write at 4:30 in the morning

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Wisdom_Tree from Texas City, TX · May 2004

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It did feel like something unwanted but...kind of wanted at the same time. I dont know, Ive never been good with emotions.

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In Rod We Trust · May 2004

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i too feel that this girl is this piece is tomented by wanting to bc the feeling is right and not wnating to bc she knows that it's wrong , she not prepared. good stuff sista

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P o e t i q R e i g n from Greensboro, NC · May 2004

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Riley Freeman wrote:
When i read it i for the feel of a female not wanting to lose her Virginity (or somethin' to that extent) but feeling pressured to do so... and on a sidenote...how do u write at 4:30 in the morning

lol...i don't know, good question...i guess it's just that my mind stays goin' 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. y'know...so regardless as 2 whether it's 4 in the morning...or 4 in the middle of the day...tha brainwavez r still dancin around ridiculously... & a lot of times, the middle of the night gives me more time and space to think...it's peaceful...& quiet...& a lot of times, i just start reflectin'...on everything....so i guess with this, i just let my pen take over...in an attempt to mirror my thoughts....& thas what ended up comin' out...

Tanochi Tres wrote:
It did feel like something unwanted but...kind of wanted at the same time. I dont know, Ive never been good with emotions.

looks like ya'll all pretty much got the same impression from the poem... truthfully...i can't really put to words exactly the meaning of the poem...like i said before, it was just thoughts on paper...with the help of a little rhymin'...

starlit wrote:
i too feel that this girl is this piece is tomented by wanting to bc the feeling is right and not wnating to bc she knows that it's wrong , she not prepared. good stuff sista